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Topic: Talent Show
Message: Posted by: ZachDavenport (Apr 30, 2016 11:19PM)
This is my entry to a talent show at my school (I didn't win), and I'd like to hear some feedback. I can see a few things that I could have done better, but I'd appreciate a second, third or fourth etc. opinion. Thanks in advance. https://youtu.be/btu0R2oFoXE
Message: Posted by: puggo (May 1, 2016 02:30PM)
Congratulations on your effort. I thought it was a very accomplished spot for a young performer.
As for feedback, I'm neither young or American and not a stage performer (95% close up), but here it is (and all just my opinion):

Positive - You seemed calm & relaxed
Positive - The Rubiks cube had a good hook
Critique - Your stagecraft/vocal delivery was a bit 'Blaine-y' e.g. single tone and static. Consider more vocal variation to convey more emotion/performance. Check out videos of Pop Haydon or Brian Miller, both very different performers but see how they command attention/use the stage.
Critique - The card trick lacked punch for a short spot. Some nice moments though. Consider a short card to mouth/shoe/fruit/etc. as a vehicle to your performance.
Positive - The misers dream was a solid combination of visual and audio.
Message: Posted by: hackmonkey (May 1, 2016 04:18PM)
First off IMHO never wear a tuxedo tshirt again. Wearing a tshirt is fine, but the tuxedo tshirt says lame/silly before you've even started.
Start was great good intro speech and the crowd liked the effect.
I feel the same on the card trick. Delivery was repetitive, you could have switched to her saying the numbers after the first guess etc.
If you're going to go into the crowd, keep it short or stick to the first row.

Overall good effort. But speak a little quicker and with more confidence. It felt you hadn't rehearsed your lines THAT much. But the crowd liked you.
Message: Posted by: ZachDavenport (May 1, 2016 04:23PM)
Thanks, I appreciate the feedback. As for the tshirt, if you knew me, lame and silly is an apt description.
Message: Posted by: puggo (May 1, 2016 05:43PM)
[quote]On May 1, 2016, ZachDavenport wrote:
Thanks, I appreciate the feedback. As for the tshirt, if you knew me, lame and silly is an apt description. [/quote]

Going on stage or performing in general is an opportunity to show a different side of yourself. You obviously have the courage to get up on stage, so cast aside that tux-shirt, and take pride in going casual, or smart, or whatever!
Your dress (whatever the style) is part of your persona... Keep at it and good luck next time
Charlie
Message: Posted by: George Ledo (May 5, 2016 01:42PM)
Nice job, and some good comments above.

It brought me back to a talent show I entered back in the 7th grade, and I'll never forget the MC's intro: "And now, for those who believe the eye sees everything, here is magician George Ledo to prove this is not so." I thought it was a really good intro.
Message: Posted by: Sardonicus (May 5, 2016 02:19PM)
I enjoyed it. Good on you for having the courage to get up there on stage. At your age, that would have been the hardest part for me. I'm sure that applies to a lot of us. Keep up the good work. :)
Message: Posted by: BrianMillerMagic (May 22, 2016 10:56AM)
[quote]On May 1, 2016, puggo wrote:
Critique - Your stagecraft/vocal delivery was a bit 'Blaine-y' e.g. single tone and static. Consider more vocal variation to convey more emotion/performance. Check out videos of Pop Haydon or Brian Miller, both very different performers but see how they command attention/use the stage.[/quote]

I'm very honored to have been mentioned in such illustrious company as Pop.

Zach: Feel free to reach out to me in PM or via email if you'd like to chat. Good on you for getting on stage. You're off to a great start!