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Pauldela Special user U.K 882 Posts |
First off I will self critique:
-I HYPE myself up WAYYY to much! I think it sounds pretty cocky? -I need atleast 1 headshot -I need a better banner -The color of the site is a bit 80s -Gallery to a few real world pics -Maybe a short promo video Can anyone else expand or add? Thank you! http://www.Pauldelafontainemagic.co.uk |
Pauldela Special user U.K 882 Posts |
It seems the paragraphs have been lost too. argh.
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Carducci Special user Denver 543 Posts |
The text on the front page is way to dense... People aren't going to read that.
You probably want to move most of that into an 'about' page. I would also use a headline on the home page (something compelling), use a consistent style for the subheadings on the 'services' page and, as you said, get some photos and videos if you can. |
jocdoc Inner circle Carlsbad, CA 1183 Posts |
A great book on web design is "Web Pages that Suck - Learn Good Design by Looking at Bad Design."
It's a fun and very informative read. It (and it's sequel) was a big help when I designed my sites. And, hey, you can find it as low as as $0.16 (U.S) used or $4 new on Amazon. Can't beat the value. http://www.amazon.com/Web-Pages-That-Suc......2&sr=8-2
Life is an improv. The game goes on...
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JohntheMagician Regular user Mechanicsburg, PA 157 Posts |
OK
Your top Banner is way to big You need to breakup the text on the first page it reads like stero instruction or a law textbook. On your Services page add small pictures for each of the subjects you know scenes taht show you doing said action. On each page ad a picture or 2 of you doing something interactive with a crowd. Just my $.02cents
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Pauldela Special user U.K 882 Posts |
Thanks guy, great stuff.
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puggo Inner circle 2022 Posts |
Paul,
I think you should be commended for being so open to critique from your peers. Check for spelling mistakes / context (of which my posts will contain many!!) e.g. "with many different surprised," Perhaps rather than virtually describing whole routines, e.g. ACR, perhaps have some pictures of performances with a caption - "..I can't believe my signed card appeared in..." etc. (& don't reveal the kicker! maybe say impossible location) Also maybe a few testimonials from varied events. Good luck! |
Jethro Magic Regular user 148 Posts |
Professional headshots and photos.
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Pauldela Special user U.K 882 Posts |
Quote:
On 2009-01-23 12:18, Jethro Magic wrote: Thanks Pugman, jethro that's a no go at the mo. havnt got the $$. |
Christopher Lyle Inner circle Dallas, Texas 5698 Posts |
Steve,
I think you need to lose the cartoon drawing of yourself. It's cute and I liked it as your avatar, but when I see that as the FIRST THING on your website, it screams amateur (to me) and knowing you how I do, I know you're far BETTER than that. I like everything else. But I think a nice headshot of you would suffice. Keep the drawing on their but somewhere OFF the main page. Christopher
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Christopher Lyle Inner circle Dallas, Texas 5698 Posts |
Man I'm stupid...sorry bout the above post!!! Wrong thread...
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